In all these four sentences (the very first composed with a student, others by professional authors), the writer uses precise descriptive particulars to stimulate a unique mood in addition to convey an unforgettable picture. While you read each paragraph, notice how place signals (see Cohesion Methods: Transitional Phrases and words) assistance to establish cohesion, guiding the readers clearly in one detail to another.
1) The Laundry Room
The home windows at either finish from the laundry room were open, but no breeze cleaned right through to carry from the stale smells of material softener, detergent, and bleach. Within the small ponds of soap and water that stained the concrete floor were stray balls of various colored lint and fuzz. Across the left wall from the room was ten rasping hairdryers, their round home windows offering glimpses of jumping socks, under garments, and fatigues. Lower the middle of the area were twelve automatic washers, challenge to in two rows. Some were chugging like steamboats others were whining and whizzing and dribbling a basketball suds.
Two was forlorn and empty, their covers flung open, with crudely attracted signs nevertheless "Broke!" A lengthy shelf partly covered in blue paper went the size of the wall, interrupted only with a locked door. Alone, in the far finish from the shelf, sitting one empty laundry basket as well as an open box of Tide. Over the shelf in the other finish would be a small bulletin board decorated with yellowed business card printing and torn slips of paper: scrawled demands for rides, reward offers for lost dogs, and telephone numbers without names or explanations.
So on the machines hummed and wheezed, gurgled and gushed, cleaned, washed, and spun.
2) Mabel's Lunch*
by Wright Morris
Mabel's Lunch was along one wall of the wide room, when a pool hall, using the empty signal shelves across the back side. Underneath the shelves were wire-back chairs, one of these stacked with magazines, and between every third or 4th chair a brass spittoon. Near the middle of the area, turning gradually as though the idle air was water, a sizable propeller fan suspended in the pressed container ceiling. It designed a whistling seem, just like a telephone pole, or perhaps an idle, throbbing locomotive, and even though the switch cord vibrated it had been cluttered with flies.